As the clouds marched over GlastonburyLust, fear, contempt and curiosity. Between love and hate lies the catalyst of true human nature. This is the story of five students over the course of a crucial forty-eight hours in their lives. p.s. This is the first story I've written in over two years, since my GCSEs, and it hasn't been proof read by anyone, so there are bound to be loads of problems with the grammar, punctuation, etc. Comments would be hugely appreciated. Many thanks Matt x |
Comments
Alisia (08-07-07)
Captivating!
Raven'sScar (07-08-07)
A really intense, gripping story. The character's changes and attitudes are really well portrayed as their lives come apart.
One continuity error that was apparent; you've set the story in England, but you used the American Police caution when Freddie's mother is arrested.
kolejante17 (5 months ago)
good start.. :} the ending could have been better but the way you write is very captivating. loved it.
steveoco (20-06-07)
Wow, a dramatic tale with lots of emotion. You capture the moments with a lot of detail and it shows when I can instantly vision the scene in my head as I interpret all the words.